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 崇文英语 - 7年级 2006-3期 Speed Zone WritingComment

My good friends


(湖北省武汉市24中初一(3)班 刘锴)

My name's Liu Kai. I study in No. 24 Middle School. I'm a kind girl. I have two good friends - Wang Lin and Zhou Lan.
We're all of the same age, in the same grade but in different classes. I'm in Class 3. Wang Lin is in Class 2 and Zhou Lan is in Class 1. We always play together after school. We have great fun playing different kinds of games.
One afternoon, I'm flying a kite near my home. I'm having a good time when my kite goes into the tree. It's so high that I can't get it down, so I'm very worried and unhappy. At this time, Wang Lin and Zhou Lan come to me. They see I'm not happy.“What's wrong? Can we help you?”they ask. I point to the kite in the tree. “Don't worry. I have got an idea. Come on, Zhou Lan,”says Wang Lin. They run away quickly. Soon they get a ladder. Then they put the ladder behind the tree. Zhou Lan says, “I'm the tallest of us three. Let me climb up and get it.” He climbs up the ladder as he says. He reaches the kite and gets it down. “Thank you very much. Wang Lin and Zhou Lan,” I cry out. But they say, “Oh, you forgot it. We are good friends.” I feel very happy.
We're also good friends at school. I'm not good at Chinese. Wang Lin does well in Chinese but not in English. Zhou Lan is good at English and Chinese but not at math. So we often help each other.
A friend is a playmate. A friend is also a teacher. I really think so. I'm really lucky to have friends like Wang Lin and Zhou Lan. Hope you have many good friends!

教师点评:这是一篇以记叙为主的文章,作者着重从生活和学习两个方面写出了朋友、同学之间的纯洁友情,且在结尾发出肺腑之言:“朋友是伙伴,朋友是老师”。寓意较深。文章介绍清楚,描写细腻,过渡自然。尤其值得一提的是,文章通顺、流畅、简洁,表达方式变化多样。
文章精彩语句回放:
We're all of the same age, in the same grade but in different classes.
我们都是同一年龄,在同一年级,都在不同班级。
We have great fun playing different kinds of games.
我们在一起玩各种各样的游戏,多么高兴!
It's so high that I can't get it down.
它(风筝)太高了,我不能把它取下来。
A friend is a playmate. A friend is also a teacher.
朋友是伙伴,朋友也是老师.

指导教师:武汉市24中 马晓燕


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